The Fool (I)

Just because I said I would give some form of feedback:

The Fool (I) by JJ Slayer
Total: 27/30
Creativity: 9/10
Match Relevance: 8/10
Character/World Building: 10/10
Feedback:
-Really great intro, runs down on the family dynamics and who JJ is at his core. Lovely writing here as well. I enjoy a well written first person story.
-Good description, I like the ay you describe movement and feeling int he frist person but I do think it’s a touch overdone in portions – nothing serious I just think there could be a shorter way of saying something which may give you more words to play with when it comes to trash talk, but I mean I get that it is a CD piece. I enjoyed it overall.
-Like the overall mystic theme of this the fool card being drawn, it’s a good story.
-Would have liked a little more of the wrestling world mixed in but a very good intro to the character and what to expect going forward. I can’t wait to see what you do here.
-I just gave a base on match relevance, wrestling was mentioned that was nice haha. Just using this because it is my regular format for grading.